Verse My Friend Wrote

#1
Tragedies too sad to see, I explicate lyrically
I set the epitome for those who be hearin me
Poisonous potions fed to us so persuasively
Peoples way wit wickedness
Doubt exists at times of reminisce
Consisting critical karma of what you sow
Good or bad, matters to you of what you bestow
Is the cup half full or half empty, unfilled simply
Thoughts remain unspoken and pages bare empty
Hopes and dreams answered merely in prayer
Actin....as if it cant happen, though one swears
The aftermath of ones decisions
Impactin lives with ones words
Intertwined with ones envisions
I speak with terms suspenseful
Articulate fate by what one writes with pencil
Things twisted, let ya mind set escape
Confined threat, long existed
Right nor wrong, many can debate
Remind self detained to no longer blind state
Open your eyes, unchain your virtue
Be wise and stay true
Maintain disregard to those who despise you

He's got a lot of talent. He's also only 15. What do you think?
 

ArtsyGirl

Well-Known Member
#3
Thats mad, only 15? That shit was dope very deep too.. Does he actually spit these or just write? Anyway maybe only thing I could say semi-negative about it is he said 'ones' a few too many times for a verse, but really to me that could just as easily be a poem, yes I know rapping is a form of poetry but most verses you can tell are meant for songs or whatever. Anyway tell him its dope.
 

Mr.Deuce

Mr.Deuce Wigalow: Male E-Gigolo
#6
c´mon man...its your rhymes but u´re afraid to say its yours.!
dats tyte.good sh*t.
do ya thang dont give a damn what people say..do it direct.not anonym.
 

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