Were Getting Cold

[jm5471]

i know that i need to post responses so when others start to post shit i will respond to their posts:

is the death brought from war necessary
to prove a point
only if from revenge do some feel extacy
thats the unusual point
cause its expected we
will leave some in a reckless flee
then we look on point
but the fact is we all actually
react on tactical actions
sent from a facualty in some factory
how are we expected 2 stay fearless
when the tearz drip down their cheeks
each week hearing the death
of another, too distrought 2 speak
some snap and get lost
minds left obsolete
cause wars scary n too eerie
2 discribe 2 unique
where win or defeat
you begin to lose control
no more concrete is ur soul
is this worth all the worlds oil and gold
i guess this jus shows
how cold this world has grown
well that was my poem........

feed back is appriciated

 

[shattered dreams]

cause its expected we
will leave some in a reckless flee

thats so true, nice poem. you might want to reread your poems, they are kind of hard to read, but like always you got great points in your poems. good job.

 

[~live2tell~]

I like this, I don't agree with all of it, but the thoughts you've written down and pieced together to make this read well are good nonetheless, thumbs up from me!

 

[jm5471]

thanks for the feedback its appriciated

 

[Belo]

I liked it a lot and did agree with it...
Kinda hard 2 comprehend the shit that goes on.. seems so far away ykno.. hardly makes the news anymore and ppl still dying...
Keep writin
Was feelin this
Peace
Belo

 

[jm5471]

good looks on the feedback belo and thats wut i mean bout it slowly losing coverage and its almost being silenced, altho i feel we should be there the world itself has to figure out another way 2 settle shit w/o people dying in masses

 

[Buck_Buck_Bing]

no doesnt do anything for me, nice effort though