When I Miss You

[kman_69]

hey this peice was cool!...good to see your still writing!

keep it up!

peace.

 

[Hennessy]

feelin it ivory, i just come here sparingly to check out what people have been writing and i haven't seen you much, but it's always refreshing to see you still writing.

anyways, this part was my favorite:

The roof over my head
The food within my stomach.
No water will quench my thirst
Only you…
You’re all I long for…crave…

basically i thought it was worded very well and i liked the comparisons.

nice stuff.

 

[Helena]

this poem is beautiful!

 

[stryk]

this poem is very nice... i just wrote one myself id like to share. because the love i feel for this girl is the same. thanks for sharing