Text Battle Round 1: Jocka vs Hennessy
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I apologize man.. i know you dont think we know/
But your girl is well known for her skills with Felação//
She said she loved the dick, but with love; i'm not the dude/
Pointed her toward the south and the bitch got chopped-and-screwed/
You claim to reign in the game with the name of a drink/
I'll get you the name of a shrink, cuz u insane if you think//
You can attain a win, bitch, this one got obtained in a blink/
I remain at the brink of this campaign, slaying the weak//
Your praying for peace and I'm raging hate on the streets/
Your vocabulary's like 50 cent or Bush aiming to speak//
Hanging with me, you'll get money, but your route is different/
Make a new decision before challenging a dude too belligerent//
Your style is too indifferent, your flow is non-existent/
To win this one you need assistance. Til' then just keep ur distance//
But your girl is well known for her skills with Felação//
She said she loved the dick, but with love; i'm not the dude/
Pointed her toward the south and the bitch got chopped-and-screwed/
You claim to reign in the game with the name of a drink/
I'll get you the name of a shrink, cuz u insane if you think//
You can attain a win, bitch, this one got obtained in a blink/
I remain at the brink of this campaign, slaying the weak//
Your praying for peace and I'm raging hate on the streets/
Your vocabulary's like 50 cent or Bush aiming to speak//
Hanging with me, you'll get money, but your route is different/
Make a new decision before challenging a dude too belligerent//
Your style is too indifferent, your flow is non-existent/
To win this one you need assistance. Til' then just keep ur distance//
My writtens-are-tight, rippin-the-mic when i hit-you-tonight.
It's over, I'll put 'Jock on the ground' like Athletes gettin-in-fights.
I'm sick-when-I-type, this Fag can't stand-the-draws.
Go-away, I know-you're-gay..
... you 'slide down more dark holes' than Santa-Clause.
I'm uppin-the-game. Nothin-has-changed, this kid-is-extra-sloppy.
Better? you couldn't have 'double my rhymes' unless you print-an-extra-copy.
Dude-you-are-ass, you got no future-with-cash. I just have-to-say.
The only time u got a 'Bill in front of u' is when u wear you're hat-that-way.
Missed-with-disses, your shit-is-hitless so i gotta diss-his-wisdom.
You couldn't 'control the Pen' if you were the leader of a Prison-System.
You don't get any pussy, I know you're exploding-with-greed.
Girls would only put 'J to their Mouth' if they were smoking-some-weed.
I drop-tremendously, you'll lose, provided-you're-not-thinking.
You could only put a 'stop-to-Hennessy' .. if you decided-to-stop-drinking.
It's over, I'll put 'Jock on the ground' like Athletes gettin-in-fights.
I'm sick-when-I-type, this Fag can't stand-the-draws.
Go-away, I know-you're-gay..
... you 'slide down more dark holes' than Santa-Clause.
I'm uppin-the-game. Nothin-has-changed, this kid-is-extra-sloppy.
Better? you couldn't have 'double my rhymes' unless you print-an-extra-copy.
Dude-you-are-ass, you got no future-with-cash. I just have-to-say.
The only time u got a 'Bill in front of u' is when u wear you're hat-that-way.
Missed-with-disses, your shit-is-hitless so i gotta diss-his-wisdom.
You couldn't 'control the Pen' if you were the leader of a Prison-System.
You don't get any pussy, I know you're exploding-with-greed.
Girls would only put 'J to their Mouth' if they were smoking-some-weed.
I drop-tremendously, you'll lose, provided-you're-not-thinking.
You could only put a 'stop-to-Hennessy' .. if you decided-to-stop-drinking.
I apologize man.. i know you dont think we know/
But your girl is well known for her skills with Felação//
decent opening....1/2
She said she loved the dick, but with love; i'm not the dude/
Pointed her toward the south and the bitch got chopped-and-screwed/
hmm...them continuing is good i guess....but lines themselves are weak....1/2....
You claim to reign in the game with the name of a drink/
I'll get you the name of a shrink, cuz u insane if you think//
You can attain a win, bitch, this one got obtained in a blink/
I remain at the brink of this campaign, slaying the weak//
since these flowed together it makes sense to grade them as a bunch...couple of nice lines in there, last lines a bit of a filler...2.5/4
Your praying for peace and I'm raging hate on the streets/
Your vocabulary's like 50 cent or Bush aiming to speak//
first lines nothing really, seconds ok...1/2
Hanging with me, you'll get money, but your route is different/
Make a new decision before challenging a dude too belligerent//
nice flow, no hard hitting punch....0.5/2
Your style is too indifferent, your flow is non-existent/
To win this one you need assistance. Til' then just keep ur distance//
decent way to close things off....1/2
This was a pretty nice verse....im pretty sure itd sound better than it reads...lot of lines thatd make a crowd go jumpy but on paper it doesnt look as complex...nice flow and things linked up well...
OVERALL: 7/14
My writtens-are-tight, rippin-the-mic when i hit-you-tonight.
It's over, I'll put 'Jock on the ground' like Athletes gettin-in-fights.
^1st lines a filler...seconds nice...1/2
I'm sick-when-I-type, this Fag can't stand-the-draws.
Go-away, I know-you're-gay..
... you 'slide down more dark holes' than Santa-Clause.
^flow went off for me and ive tried reading it a few times, maybe im missing something...ill still give some credit for that punch...0.5/2
I'm uppin-the-game. Nothin-has-changed, this kid-is-extra-sloppy.
Better? you couldn't have 'double my rhymes' unless you print-an-extra-copy.
^first lines a filler...seconds ok...0.5/2
Dude-you-are-ass, you got no future-with-cash. I just have-to-say.
The only time u got a 'Bill in front of u' is when u wear you're hat-that-way.
continuing theme in this verse...a lot of multis but not much hard hitting...1/2
Missed-with-disses, your shit-is-hitless so i gotta diss-his-wisdom.
You couldn't 'control the Pen' if you were the leader of a Prison-System.
a bit nicer this time...second lines cool...1/2
You don't get any pussy, I know you're exploding-with-greed.
Girls would only put 'J to their Mouth' if they were smoking-some-weed.
second line set up nicely by the first....1.5/2
I drop-tremendously, you'll lose, provided-you're-not-thinking.
You could only put a 'stop-to-Hennessy' .. if you decided-to-stop-drinking.
decent closer as well....1/2
Verse started off with too many multis not enough punches but got a lot nicer towards the end...the - - - are cool but you did something im guilty of at times as well and go overboard and sacrifice punch strength...still though i like how things picked up second half of the verse...
OVERALL 6.5
CONCLUSION:
Jockas verse was pretty consistent through out...Hennes was a verse of two halves for me...consistency edged it and im just giving this to Jocka...
nice battle...
peace
But your girl is well known for her skills with Felação//
decent opening....1/2
She said she loved the dick, but with love; i'm not the dude/
Pointed her toward the south and the bitch got chopped-and-screwed/
hmm...them continuing is good i guess....but lines themselves are weak....1/2....
You claim to reign in the game with the name of a drink/
I'll get you the name of a shrink, cuz u insane if you think//
You can attain a win, bitch, this one got obtained in a blink/
I remain at the brink of this campaign, slaying the weak//
since these flowed together it makes sense to grade them as a bunch...couple of nice lines in there, last lines a bit of a filler...2.5/4
Your praying for peace and I'm raging hate on the streets/
Your vocabulary's like 50 cent or Bush aiming to speak//
first lines nothing really, seconds ok...1/2
Hanging with me, you'll get money, but your route is different/
Make a new decision before challenging a dude too belligerent//
nice flow, no hard hitting punch....0.5/2
Your style is too indifferent, your flow is non-existent/
To win this one you need assistance. Til' then just keep ur distance//
decent way to close things off....1/2
This was a pretty nice verse....im pretty sure itd sound better than it reads...lot of lines thatd make a crowd go jumpy but on paper it doesnt look as complex...nice flow and things linked up well...
OVERALL: 7/14
My writtens-are-tight, rippin-the-mic when i hit-you-tonight.
It's over, I'll put 'Jock on the ground' like Athletes gettin-in-fights.
^1st lines a filler...seconds nice...1/2
I'm sick-when-I-type, this Fag can't stand-the-draws.
Go-away, I know-you're-gay..
... you 'slide down more dark holes' than Santa-Clause.
^flow went off for me and ive tried reading it a few times, maybe im missing something...ill still give some credit for that punch...0.5/2
I'm uppin-the-game. Nothin-has-changed, this kid-is-extra-sloppy.
Better? you couldn't have 'double my rhymes' unless you print-an-extra-copy.
^first lines a filler...seconds ok...0.5/2
Dude-you-are-ass, you got no future-with-cash. I just have-to-say.
The only time u got a 'Bill in front of u' is when u wear you're hat-that-way.
continuing theme in this verse...a lot of multis but not much hard hitting...1/2
Missed-with-disses, your shit-is-hitless so i gotta diss-his-wisdom.
You couldn't 'control the Pen' if you were the leader of a Prison-System.
a bit nicer this time...second lines cool...1/2
You don't get any pussy, I know you're exploding-with-greed.
Girls would only put 'J to their Mouth' if they were smoking-some-weed.
second line set up nicely by the first....1.5/2
I drop-tremendously, you'll lose, provided-you're-not-thinking.
You could only put a 'stop-to-Hennessy' .. if you decided-to-stop-drinking.
decent closer as well....1/2
Verse started off with too many multis not enough punches but got a lot nicer towards the end...the - - - are cool but you did something im guilty of at times as well and go overboard and sacrifice punch strength...still though i like how things picked up second half of the verse...
OVERALL 6.5
CONCLUSION:
Jockas verse was pretty consistent through out...Hennes was a verse of two halves for me...consistency edged it and im just giving this to Jocka...
nice battle...
peace
add something constructive or just delete your post...
ive gone through my reasons...i even reread the verses to make sure i didnt miss anything...
Hennes is nice but for a lot of it it just rhymes a lot with multis without decent punches like i said...
i went through things line by line...the other vote just said "i like more than that" and that was all...
thats how i see things...you dont like it, i couldnt care...go start a fan club or say something intelligent...
peace
ive gone through my reasons...i even reread the verses to make sure i didnt miss anything...
Hennes is nice but for a lot of it it just rhymes a lot with multis without decent punches like i said...
i went through things line by line...the other vote just said "i like more than that" and that was all...
thats how i see things...you dont like it, i couldnt care...go start a fan club or say something intelligent...
peace
like you said, different people just have different outlooks...
i think the fact that you rushed the verse played part of it too...
assuming you get through the round i know youll be coming a lot harder in the next match anyway...this was virtually keyed up from what you said so im looking forward to seeing a heavy verse from you...
good battle in any case....
peace
i think the fact that you rushed the verse played part of it too...
assuming you get through the round i know youll be coming a lot harder in the next match anyway...this was virtually keyed up from what you said so im looking forward to seeing a heavy verse from you...
good battle in any case....
peace
I apologize man.. i know you dont think we know/
But your girl is well known for her skills with Felação//
She said she loved the dick, but with love; i'm not the dude/
Pointed her toward the south and the bitch got chopped-and-screwed/
This isnt the best of starts i would say, its just not personal mocking someones 'girl'. metaphor not the strongest on the last line but the flow was good over these lines
You claim to reign in the game with the name of a drink/
I'll get you the name of a shrink, cuz u insane if you think//
You can attain a win, bitch, this one got obtained in a blink/
I remain at the brink of this campaign, slaying the weak//
relevent punch in the 1st two lines but very average rhys on the second pair
Your praying for peace and I'm raging hate on the streets/
Your vocabulary's like 50 cent or Bush aiming to speak//
reasonably good punch
Hanging with me, you'll get money, but your route is different/
Make a new decision before challenging a dude too belligerent//
not relevent for me
Your style is too indifferent, your flow is non-existent/
To win this one you need assistance. Til' then just keep ur distance//
nice rhymes and flow and reasonable punch
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My writtens-are-tight, rippin-the-mic when i hit-you-tonight.
It's over, I'll put 'Jock on the ground' like Athletes gettin-in-fights.
great opening, i too like to start off with an opening line that may not necessarily be a punch but a set up, helps me get into it. really liked the punch on the 2nd
I'm sick-when-I-type, this Fag can't stand-the-draws.
Go-away, I know-you're-gay..
... you 'slide down more dark holes' than Santa-Clause.
i like the way you worked these lines out because the flow stays on point for me, but maybe its just me but sexual references in battles as punches really dont do a lot for me
I'm uppin-the-game. Nothin-has-changed, this kid-is-extra-sloppy.
Better? you couldn't have 'double my rhymes' unless you print-an-extra-copy.
reasonably good punch on the 2nd, nice to see multis on the first
Dude-you-are-ass, you got no future-with-cash. I just have-to-say.
The only time u got a 'Bill in front of u' is when u wear you're hat-that-way.
very good
Missed-with-disses, your shit-is-hitless so i gotta diss-his-wisdom.
You couldn't 'control the Pen' if you were the leader of a Prison-System.
2nd line made me laugh, very well set up, nice job
You don't get any pussy, I know you're exploding-with-greed.
Girls would only put 'J to their Mouth' if they were smoking-some-weed.
I drop-tremendously, you'll lose, provided-you're-not-thinking.
You could only put a 'stop-to-Hennessy' .. if you decided-to-stop-drinking.
Strong finish
VOTE: Henny
But your girl is well known for her skills with Felação//
She said she loved the dick, but with love; i'm not the dude/
Pointed her toward the south and the bitch got chopped-and-screwed/
This isnt the best of starts i would say, its just not personal mocking someones 'girl'. metaphor not the strongest on the last line but the flow was good over these lines
You claim to reign in the game with the name of a drink/
I'll get you the name of a shrink, cuz u insane if you think//
You can attain a win, bitch, this one got obtained in a blink/
I remain at the brink of this campaign, slaying the weak//
relevent punch in the 1st two lines but very average rhys on the second pair
Your praying for peace and I'm raging hate on the streets/
Your vocabulary's like 50 cent or Bush aiming to speak//
reasonably good punch
Hanging with me, you'll get money, but your route is different/
Make a new decision before challenging a dude too belligerent//
not relevent for me
Your style is too indifferent, your flow is non-existent/
To win this one you need assistance. Til' then just keep ur distance//
nice rhymes and flow and reasonable punch
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My writtens-are-tight, rippin-the-mic when i hit-you-tonight.
It's over, I'll put 'Jock on the ground' like Athletes gettin-in-fights.
great opening, i too like to start off with an opening line that may not necessarily be a punch but a set up, helps me get into it. really liked the punch on the 2nd
I'm sick-when-I-type, this Fag can't stand-the-draws.
Go-away, I know-you're-gay..
... you 'slide down more dark holes' than Santa-Clause.
i like the way you worked these lines out because the flow stays on point for me, but maybe its just me but sexual references in battles as punches really dont do a lot for me
I'm uppin-the-game. Nothin-has-changed, this kid-is-extra-sloppy.
Better? you couldn't have 'double my rhymes' unless you print-an-extra-copy.
reasonably good punch on the 2nd, nice to see multis on the first
Dude-you-are-ass, you got no future-with-cash. I just have-to-say.
The only time u got a 'Bill in front of u' is when u wear you're hat-that-way.
very good
Missed-with-disses, your shit-is-hitless so i gotta diss-his-wisdom.
You couldn't 'control the Pen' if you were the leader of a Prison-System.
2nd line made me laugh, very well set up, nice job
You don't get any pussy, I know you're exploding-with-greed.
Girls would only put 'J to their Mouth' if they were smoking-some-weed.
I drop-tremendously, you'll lose, provided-you're-not-thinking.
You could only put a 'stop-to-Hennessy' .. if you decided-to-stop-drinking.
Strong finish
VOTE: Henny
