Emptyness

[Buck_Buck_Bing]

This was really good, I think I will print it out and put it on my wall

 

[TG1 Ghetto One]

Yeah real deep i can relate to that when i'm writin lyrics too

 

[Jurhum]

Nice me like a lot...

Great job... as usual...


keeps dropping, and grats on ur mod spot

been a way for a while things changed alot.

peace

 

[MaKa\/eLiThaD0N]

this was a damn good poem enjoyed reading it

 

[jaimie.uk fan]

nice poem cown , i think its cool how some people can just sit down and write a nice piece of work to entertain themselves and others . well thought out poem thanks :thumb:

 

[Cown]

^Thanks for the feedback guys :thumb:

 

[CalcuoCuchicheo]

Very impressed with this effort Cown.

I said it in another thread, when writer's block dawns on you, the ebst way to overcome it is to write about the frustration you're feeling.

This does appear a bit more organised than that though.

I liked the whole temptation concept that was there - that you were without your zest & the paper was mocking you. Personification used to a comfortable degree - not too limited while restrained from overstretching yourself in pursuit of a meticulously detailed use of popular poetic technique.

Last four lines were really nice.

I would go into structure again but I guess everyone can see stanza, line length, rhyme scheme & syllable count - or lack of - for themselves.

 

[kman_69]

i love poems like this...ive written a few on the same kinda tip..

Only option I have is to surrender
I leave the silence to present the words, and all of their splendour

^^liked the ending, was dope


peace.

 

[Cown]

Very impressed with this effort Cown.

I said it in another thread, when writer's block dawns on you, the ebst way to overcome it is to write about the frustration you're feeling.

This does appear a bit more organised than that though.

I liked the whole temptation concept that was there - that you were without your zest & the paper was mocking you. Personification used to a comfortable degree - not too limited while restrained from overstretching yourself in pursuit of a meticulously detailed use of popular poetic technique.

Last four lines were really nice.

I would go into structure again but I guess everyone can see stanza, line length, rhyme scheme & syllable count - or lack of - for themselves.

Thanks for the reply, you really go into the depth of a peom when you reply don't you? You nailed the topic as to what I was trying to potray with this poem :thumb:

i love poems like this...ive written a few on the same kinda tip..

Only option I have is to surrender
I leave the silence to present the words, and all of their splendour

^^liked the ending, was dope


peace.

Glad you liked it

Post some of them

 

[Belo]

Which lines are those?

Thanks for you all for your replies

The two lines that rhyme Ticks and Breaks

 

[Cown]

^Ah, I see what you mean... Yeah it does fuck it all up doesnt it Guess I'll have to take my time next time

 

[Ivory$horty]

Woah, this was dope as hell! I'm going through that same problem right now so it's great to see someone else writing about it. I can't pick this apart, I was feeling the whole piece in its entirety.
Good job :thumb:
Keep it up!

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[Cown]

^Thanks a lot, glad to see you liked it