Therapeutic Dream

#1
this is about a re-occurring dream ive been having for a lil while...feedback would be nice.


Therapeutic Dream -7 May 2005
i havn't gotta doctor to tell me what my thoughts mean
-but i do have the ability to write em as i see em'..


..like this dream that i've been havin recently
it seems to be different to any i've had previously
-see, i start off naked -sinking in some water
its all dark, and my body is barely supported
of course i can't breathe, but i dont feel that nervous
..coz i see someone i know -just up a little further
it seems absurd i know, but she's naked as well..
and as she swims down to me, i feel my heart swell
i mean as far as i can tell, she knows whats going on
-she kisses me on the lips, and air fills up my lungs
i come undone as we start to float to the surface
with her legs wrapped around me -i think im inserted..
i cant be sure of it, but i realise were at sea..
-we start making love as we wash over to the beach
..i never wanna leave -it just feels so beautiful
-she licks my ear and does things that she used to do
whatever my view, things just seem so right..
-being inside, as i see a tear form in her eye
its not a surprise, coz i really feel the same way, plus
-what we have in that moment, is something very sacred..
but before i wake up, she says something that amazes me
-"i love you, and some day.. i want to have ur baby."
 
#3
yeah, it is...its like the only re-occuring dream ive had since i was a kid....thats why i wrote this...hence the intro..

thanks for feedback man :)

peace.
 
#5
Another good drop from you Kman. I especially like this poem as it is alot different from others I have read. Your imagery and expression is brilliant. Hope you continue to keep up the good work.
 
#6
lol thanks fishman....but did u like the poem?!

sara: thanks heaps :)....yeh, i like to bring something diff 2 the table...at least i try to :p...thanks for the positive feedback!

peace.
 

ArtsyGirl

Well-Known Member
#10
lol good idea writting your dream out like that, I like the way it flowed together.. Say ever think of showin ur special lady this poem?
 
#11
lol@menace

thanks artisticgirl, yeah i did show her once upon a time.....but i had this dream/wrote this after we broke up....so iguess it didnt have the same impact...


thanks for peepin anyway :)....hehe it was weird reading back over this :p
 

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