With You

[Ivory$horty]

The latest from yours truly.

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~*Ivory$horty*~


With You

It’s a road not often travelled
But when I saw you there I knew,
The future that I wanted,
Was a future shared with you.

You never knew how much I wanted it,
Why I wanted it or when,
But the feelings that were developing
Were as more than just a friend.

You gave me greater reason to be
The person I could be,
You gave me ample room to grow
And show the person that lived inside of me.

Your love has redefined me
And given me life in a brand new form,
As soon as you said those 3 words to me
A special part of me was born.

A feeling that’s never before been felt
Has taken over my pure existence,
Indescribable are you
But I’m so grateful for your persistence.

There’s no resistance in your hold
And I confess I’m yours completely,
I fall more in love with you each day
Because it’s you, who does, complete me.

Te Quiero papichulo

 

[kman_69]

nice 1...but this wasn't the peice u were workin on?? what happen? hehe

flow seems a little off in places....but is still cool, always good to see a new drop from ya.

Te Quiero papichulo? -what mean?

peace.

 

[Ivory$horty]

kman_69: No, you're right...this wasn't the piece I was workin on. But my brain was fried so, I decided to stop before I hurt myself, lol. This is one I had written, hmm, about a couple of days ago. So...I posted this one up instead. "Te Quiero" means I love you in Spanish. Somebody special told me that
Thanks for peepin....

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~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[Jurhum]

This was a nice love poem. Anyway, I wanted to know what Te Quiero papichulo meant so i looked it up. It led me to Aliyah website. You know the rest. Not to freak you out or anything, am no stalker.


Seriously I'm not.

 

[Ivory$horty]

Jurhum: LOL....you're a funny guy. Thanks for peepin this piece, I do appreciate it. Even though you are a stalker It's all good...Thanks for the love

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~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[Ridin 4 Pac]

i liked this, i like these types of poems that get to the point but dont put everything out there....lol I know that makes no sense but I like the poem, good job on it, i can tell just by reading it how in love u are

 

[Ivory$horty]

Ridin_4_Pac: Am I that obvious? What you said made perfect sense, so....thanks. I appreciate you taking the time out to peep this. Means a lot.

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~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[~live2tell~]

Beautiful love poem... what more can I say other than I'm glad you got to write this and feel this way. I hope you spend many more days and nights in the bliss your poem portrays. Lovely piece girl... i'm sure you'll keep it up

 

[Sebastian]

in a few words:

simple structure, strong message :thumb:

 

[Belo]

3 words? oh yea... I saw the movie "suck, my, cock"
hehe.. sorry couldn't resist.. it's from Tomcats if you didn't know
Poem was great though as usual.. very sweet indeed.. yup yup it was
Made me smile when I read it
Peace girl

 

[GhettoStar]

The latest from yours truly.

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~


With You

It’s a road not often travelled
But when I saw you there I knew,
The future that I wanted,
Was a future shared with you.

You never knew how much I wanted it,
Why I wanted it or when,
But the feelings that were developing
Were as more than just a friend.

You gave me greater reason to be
The person I could be,
You gave me ample room to grow
And show the person that lived inside of me.

Your love has redefined me
And given me life in a brand new form,
As soon as you said those 3 words to me
A special part of me was born.

A feeling that’s never before been felt
Has taken over my pure existence,
Indescribable are you
But I’m so grateful for your persistence.

There’s no resistance in your hold
And I confess I’m yours completely,
I fall more in love with you each day
Because it’s you, who does, complete me.

Te Quiero papichulo

once again you are the one and only, the pure poet on here I have to say Im feeling this dorp due in part the imagiry is quite clear and the fact I can imgaine you reading this almost as a letter of sorts. I can see that whoever your writing to is quite a chram indeed. The words you selected (which Ive highlighted) make it so we as readers can see how much you trully want this person indeed which is made clear by you doing all of this writing haha. Your a pearl girl, quite hoenstly I always take pleasure when reading your writings, keep it gansgta keep it true.


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[Ivory$horty]

xxsaraxx: Thank you girl, I truly appreciate your kind words. This guy I have is a gem and he treats me in a way I'm not used to. Like a princess. Once again, your words mean alot. Thank you.

beReal: In a couple of words.....Thank you

Belo: Where's an eyebrow-raising smiley when you need one? LOL...Umm, no, I'm not quite familiar with those 3 words or that movie but thanks for putting your 2 cents worth in Means a lot...thanx!

GhettoStar: I'm not too sure what to say to your words but I can say that they are greatly appreciated and they made me smile. I can also say I appreciate you still coming through to peep my work. It means a lot, as always so...thank you.

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~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[Belo]

Belo: Where's an eyebrow-raising smiley when you need one? LOL...Umm, no, I'm not quite familiar with those 3 words or that movie but thanks for putting your 2 cents worth in Means a lot...thanx!
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Get the dvd out.. is a good movie

 

[shattered dreams]

i liked this poem, it seems very heartfelt, and it kind of seemed like in some places your heart wanted to rhyme but your brain wasnt in it..not a bad thing happens to me a lot...the reason why i said that is because your rhyming pattern was off...but still a nice poem good job

 

[IMAGINATIVES]

first and foremost, i would like to say that i miss you precious. the poem was on point to me. i guess people percieve and read things differently. the structure was beautifully layed out. the message was strong and anybody can appreciate the words you write down. i'm glad you fell that person to make you happy love. i love you, take care of yourself love.

elton...

 

[Ivory$horty]

WhenUrherofalls: Thank you

IMAGINATIVES: Hey deary, I do appreciate you peeping my work as always. Thank you for your kind words. I'm very lucky to have found that person who makes me so remarkably happy...I'm pretty sure he knows how much he means to me. If you haven't already, I hope you find that someone too...they're out there somewhere. Thank you for the immense love, it's being stored somewhere safe

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~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[Robbo1984]

How can you say my poem is pure simple when that just takes the piss? There is no way you'd get that published in the UK! No wonder you use Poetry.com!

Laterz

 

[Ivory$horty]

For your information, I never called your poem simple. I said it lacked emotion. There's a difference. This response just goes to show what kind of a person you are. Regardless of the feedback a poet gives you on yours, you should analyse theirs without holding a grudge. It seems you're not capable of that either. This just proves how immature you are. How old did you say you were? 20 going on 2? Grow up please...
This poem is simple because that's how I wrote it. I felt the 'emotion' (key word here) would speak for itself without complex words and rhyming patterns doing it for me. That's why it's the way it is. I don't intend for a piece like this to get 'published', but I certainly have other pieces that are. If you want to know about any of those that I've posted up over the 4 years that I've been here, please feel free to ask. Since most of them are no longer up on this board since the server changed over, you can't search through the pages to read them for yourself.
Don't judge my abilities by this one piece you've read. You don't know shit. I never dissed you, and yet you come at me like that!? Wow...some poet you'll become.
Whether you love it or hate it, you still read it. And it's still enough to receive a response. That at least tells me I'm doing something.

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~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[Levendi]

woah ivory, calm down, dont let things like this get to you...nice to see you around anyway koukla.

As for the poem, the opening few lines were good, the last few lines were good, but without doubt my fav lines were -

"Your love has redefined me
And given me life in a brand new form,
As soon as you said those 3 words to me
A special part of me was born." - awesome.



Sounds like someones in love, im heartbroken makia, stin eia sas... :thumb:






Min stenehoryesis koukla, ehome vlakes mesa tho, kai neos ine aftos. yiasou choupi

 

[Ivory$horty]

Levendi: Yiasou Kouklo Thanks for peeping this as always (and your sweet words)you know I'm very appreciative. Sorry for that bitch session up above but you know....nevra. LOL. It's the Greek in me Blame my father....
Euharisto pou eipes auto, einai blakas, to xero. Ti na kanies eh? lol....Thanks again sweetie. Means a lot.

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~*Ivory$horty*~